Good move: The Internet appears increasingly essential to many areas of the modern life, yet its educational importance has been challenged as 'seriously over-rated'.

This answer is a good move because it is a clear broad statement

Bad move: I think the Internet is great but some people feel it is over-rated.

This answer is a bad move because it uses

• emotive language

• personal pronouns (thus not objective)

Good move: The Internet is a 'network of networks' connecting millions of people around the globe through their computers (Ebbs & Horey, 1995, ppp3-8): it offers both resources and virtual interaction to those who have access on a grand scale.

This answer is a good move because it is

• clear

• brief

• referenced

Bad Move: The internet is the best computer tool developed in recent history.

This answer is a bad move because

• it is not referenced

• uses emotive language

• has no explanation of the features
  

Good move: Firstly, although the internet is fundamental in today's educational sector, it will be argued that the Internet's role in education is less significant than the teacher's role. Secondly, the lack of face- to face peer interaction when using the Internet limits the students affective development and therefore the development of their people skills.

This answer is a good move because it

• signposts aspects of the essay to be discussed

• has clear discussion

Bad Move: Education is perceived as fundamental to public and private sectors, be it academia or business, yet it includes affective development and people skills which ideally require the real life interaction a computer cannot give.

This answer is a bad move because

• the sentence is too lengthy

• the scope is not clear enough

• aspects to be covered in the essay are not clear enough
  

Good move: The overall educational opportunities offered by Internet access may not be over-rated, but in the intrapersonal and interpersonal sectors of education's role through which people learn to relate to themselves and to others, it is both disturbingly, and seriously, 'over-rated'.

This answer is a good move because it is based on the essay's arguments

Bad Move: In conclusion, the Internet is 'over-rated' in terms of educational importance.

This answer is a bad move because

• it simply rewords the question

• the statement is not supported by an argument